IELTS Short course with Mr. Ernest Lada from US
Aziza Restu Febrianto - IELTS Simulation
Writing task 2
Band Score 6.5
My original handwriting
Revised version
In many countries such as China, Japan, Brazil, and
Indonesia, fixed punishments for people who committed crimes are a really
important way to deter crime. The
government hopes that by giving certain fixed punishments to criminals, it can
prevent crime. However, some people have
a different view on how to punish criminals.
The reason why criminals commit a particular depends on their
motives. They are considered an
important factor in the sentencing process for the sake of protecting a
person’s legal rights.
Those who think giving fixed punishments to criminals point
out that many crimes harm the victims.
If there is no way to stop crime, people lives will be threatened, which
leads to chaos. In their view, the only
way to stop crime is to create a deterrent, and fixed punishments are one
solution to this problem. Once criminals
are strictly punished, they will think twice before doing such crimes
again. Not to mention, law enforcement
considers this particular method as a great lesson or warning.
On the other hand, people who are concerned about legal
rights think there are other ways to fight crime. Instead of giving fixed punishments such as
the death penalty or life in prison for certain serious crimes, the court
should actually consider the motives and reasons or even the mental state of
the criminal. It is really important to
review the many aspects of each criminal case when giving a court verdict.
In conclusion, I think giving fixed punishments is the best
solution for stopping crime and maintaining law and order in society because it
makes people obey the laws.
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